Hello!! I have been making a book lately and have finished the first chapter! I want to share it with you so you could give me your opinions!! Here it is:
Chapter One
Going home with a Stranger!
Hello! Let me introduce my self. I am Alisha and I am 11 years old!! I have six siblings (not including me). There names are Aliyah, Exavier, Anna, Israel, Joanna, Christoper (but we call him Chrissy). Here is some of what my siblings like to do! Aliyah, who is thirteen, loves to text all of her friend 24/7. Alisha, who is eleven, loves to read and write. Exavier, who is ten, is adiccted to video games. Anna, who is eight, is a little sweetheart too. Isreal, who is six, loves to do school and swim. Joanna, who is three, love to watch Dora and Blues clues. Israel, who is one, is a snuggler. We live in Brownsville, Texas in an old house with only three bedrooms. We have been wanting to get a new house but we just dont have enough money for it yet.
Recently, our dad passed away in a big car wreck! It has been hard trying to be a good example for my younger siblings when you are so sad too. One day we got a letter from town saying on the way to town our mother was kidnapped and they found her body dead at the side of the road. I handed the letter to Aliyah and seconds later the house was filled with crying.
That day my life had changed. At first i wondered where my dad had gone when he died and now i have to wonder wher mom went to. "Where do people go when they die" I wondered.
Aliyah was scanning through the letter when she found that is said " Meet me at the court house as soon as you get this letter." Aliyah who was sobbing said "Lets get going so we can this whole thing over with and go live with Grandma." At the sound of that everybody burst into bigger tears.
We started our walk since we couldn't afford a car and plus if we did have a car who would drive it. By the time we walked one mile our feet already started aching really bad. Then suddenly a fancy car came down the road and there was a woman with blonde hair sitting in the front. She had a raident dress on. After another mile we sat down for a rest and there was complete silence. Finally, Exavier broke the silence by saying "What if MawMaw won't take all of us and will only take two of us? Where would everybody else go??" "I don't know where we would go" I said "but all I know is that i want to stay together!! Agree??" "Agree" everybody said at the same time. I felt so bad for Israel because he couldn't get that mommy is gone.....forever.
We finally made it to the court house and was greeted by some well dressed men who showed us to our seats. Right when we sat down the judge sarted talking " We are here to figure out where we are going to send these children. We are probably going to put them in an orpanage if we can't get in contact with any of there reaaltives. If anybody knows someone that would like to adopted these children please stand."
Only one person in the whole place stood up. It was a woman who looked pretty nice in her raident dress and blonde hair. She said "Hello my name is Holly Renee and I would like to adopted all these little orphans." My eyes grew bigger and bigger by the moment. Thats the woman I saw in the fancy car on the way over here. "Should i be excited or scared?" I thought while stitting there patiently.
After a while it was official that we were going to go home with this lady we don't even know!! While the papers were being signed we sat outside and waited. Anna said "Why are we going to go home with some stranger?" " Remember our mom died and there is no one to live with us so someone adopted us" I replied sadly. "Oh ya .....but im starving" she replied back. We had totally forgot that we haven't eaten since this morning.
Right then there was a burst through the door and there she stood our new mother. She said "Come along now there is no time to waste im in a hurry." "Why are you in a hurry??" asked Anna. "Beacause i am so excited to show you your new house" she repiled in a suspicious way. "Ok im kinda excited too" Anna said.
Everybody practically fell to sleep on the ride to our new home. The cushions were so soft!! Soon we came to a stop and right in front of us stood a huge brick building. It was so amazing. Everybody was out from the car in a flash and the door was opened by a maid!! There were no words to speak except oooooooo's and ahhhhhhhhh's. "But there was one thing missing!! Holly Renne, where had she gone?? I didn't see her get out of the car." My thoughts were disturbed by a maid asking me if i would like to see my own room!
Everybody felt like they were in paridise until Holly Renee hadn't been seen the whole night. There is something suspicious about that lady. "Aliyah" I called. Aliyah answered "What do you want?" "Have you seen our Holly Renee since we got out of the car?" I asked. Aliyah repiled confused "No i actually haven't ." "Oh really I haven't either. Thats weird!!" I said. "We should probably get all the kids ready for bed they have had a long day" Aliyah sugested.
We all woke up very early the next morning and still no sign of Holly Renne. I was starting to worry about what we have gotten our selves into. I asked the butler if he had any idea where she could be and he also had no idea either. So i decided to go look therough her room (I don't think it is a smart idea but im still going to do it).
I made it into her room and boy was it a mess! Does she ever clean?? I was looking non stop until I found a little peice of paper under her bed. It was very easy to make out but...... the door is opening!! All the sudden I felt pushed and shoved and then there was blackness.
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